~ by yearzerowriters on April 30, 2010.
Posted in guest, Poetry
The way you have used colour and blurred text in this amplifies the words beautifully. The words feel ephemeral and evanescent as though they are on the point of being lost. Sphaeroid in particular blew me away – it is painful and poignant like Stevie Smith’s Not Waving but Drowning would have been if it had been a hundred times better. Like the ending to Murakami’s Norwegian Wood – which is as high a compliment as I could pay.
yearzerowriters said this on April 30, 2010 at 9:55 am | Reply
Very nice. This is like reading through clouds, or a fine layer of cotton candy. The words remain partially hidden in a mist, like the haze that clouds my thoughts on this early morning.
PD Allen said this on April 30, 2010 at 11:39 am | Reply
I like these. Are they deliberately blurred? I’ve got my lenses in & had to squint. I didn’t mind though. The under-arm farting & hysterical asthma are solid sound/mind effects, like spice. Everything is reading whimsical to me, lately. Don’t know if it is or if it is my mind-set.
yearzerowriters said this on April 30, 2010 at 1:11 pm | Reply
I took it that the blur was deliberate – it added to the feel of almost not there, like it’s dissolving on the page
Dan Holloway said this on April 30, 2010 at 2:50 pm | Reply
I’m a sucker for visual typography. I really like the old-style typewritten characters. The blue background seems to suggest more their impress than the pink.
yearzerowriters said this on April 30, 2010 at 3:01 pm | Reply
yes, I’d noticed that too
Dan Holloway said this on April 30, 2010 at 3:12 pm | Reply
Thanks for the lovely reaction folks.
Yes – the text is deliberately blurred. Both are poems of my childhood, and I wanted to try and create a feeling of memories receding into the distance.
Stuart said this on April 30, 2010 at 8:00 pm | Reply
Like a road that was once a thoroughfare that the weeds are starting to reclaim. That’s a technique that sounds like it’s very underused but has huge potential.
yearzerowriters said this on April 30, 2010 at 10:49 pm | Reply
A very unusual name (and subject) for a poem, but that’s what makes it special. The fluff bit near the end made me smile. I enjoyed this piece.
Anne Lyken-Garner said this on May 1, 2010 at 7:44 am | Reply
So so lovely. I think sphaeroid is my favourite. The blurred text work wonders for it. Exactly like receding memories.
S. Melville said this on May 1, 2010 at 10:35 am | Reply
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